Here's the start of a short story I'm writing:
I'm asking for a critique of my writing (analogous to what CodeReview.SE does for code). Please describe how it can be improved. Part of the motivation is to identify my weaknesses, and identify better writing styles. The words in links are new for me.
I'm trying to build some mystery as to what this powerful new technology actually is, and what impact is has had on Zhou Ziwang's life.
Here's the basic idea in English:
At first, most people were strongly against it, saying we definitely don't want to play God. At that time people were fearful, worried about future consequences. How will mankind change? People had many criticisms: After using it, will a person still be a person? Using this technology is fundamentally unnatural. These arguments caused world politicians to also oppose it, and further, except for the world's leading scientists, nobody was permitted to use this technology.
Actually, this is just the official explanation, the real story we'll perhaps never know for sure. Some people say every government recognizes this kind of technology is powerful; they don't want to simply let other countries utilize this dangerous technology, so the world governments secretly conduct research. Some people blame rogue scientists, selling the technology and then fleeing into retirement. Now one thing is for sure, this technology is everywhere, and is astonishing.
I'm Zhou Ziwang. About 20 years ago, scientists discovered a technology that would change the world. That time, I was a little kid, and did not know scientists were conducting this kind of important research. In any case, this new technology has had a profound impact on my life.
I include in case of "this makes absolutely no sense" sentences, but I'm not really concerned about the English.