Please critique my writing. Words with links are new for me.
Basically the idea is what Tang Ho said: "Write more, get corrected more and analyze why a sentence you wrote is being corrected." I've eventually concluded that it's not possible to learn Chinese without making many, many mistakes.
I feel totally blind a lot of the time: someone rewrites a sentence of mine and I'll feel is massively better, like I've been taken out of Plato's cave.
My mother noticed I was getting fat, and she wanted to help me but a long-term eating habit is hard to break. Perhaps I already have an eating disorder? My mother eventually asked my father, who was always busy working, to help, so he took me to see a doctor. While I say "doctor", to this day I'm still not sure. I asked "Father, are we going to see the doctor? Mother already took me to see the doctor and it didn't work." My father hesitantly replied "oh, this doctor is not the same." What a mysterious sentence! How are they "not the same"? These days I have a clearer understanding of the situation, but back then I was just a little girl. I would often go to the doctor, and I trusted my father, I wouldn't have thought it has such a long-term impact on my life.