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If I was fat, and now I'm not, which is better: 我长胖 or 我长胖了 or 我长了胖 or 我长了胖了?

Suppose in the past I was fat, and now I'm no longer fat. I'm wondering which 了 is appropriate: 我长胖 我长胖了 我长了胖 我长了胖了 I don't think we can just leave off the 了. It makes sense to put 了 at the end as ...
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang and the revolutionary new technology

Here's the start of a short story I'm writing: 首先,大多数人强烈反对它,说人一定不要“扮演上帝”。当时他们害怕极了,对于未来的效果有关心。人性会怎么改变?人有很多批评:使用它以后,人还是人吗?用这种技术就是根本不自然的。这些论点使世界政客也反对它,而且除了世界上最伟大的科学家,谁都不允许用这种技术。 其实这只是正式的说法,...
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How does someone train using 了 correctly?

I'm really bad at 了ing: Nankai students say I'm bad at this. My teacher says I'm bad at this. Even Tang Ho mentioned my abuse of 了. Moreover, I'm sure I'm not the only one who is really bad at 了ing:...
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Writing critique request: Welcome to the world of DNA editing

Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, and 6: 欢迎来到现代的“DNA编辑的新世界”。原来我差不多是第一个DNA编辑的人,而且我爸是世界上领导的研究者之一,一起偷偷地进行研究。我小时候造成我减肥的那个注射器是这种新技术的一个例子。那时候这项技术刚开始研发了,所以当时是非常基础的。起初,多数人无法使用甚至连DNA编辑的存在也不知道。世界政府立即介入了,...
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang's father takes her to the “doctor”

Continuing from part 2 (see also part 1): 我妈注意到我当时变胖了,她想要帮我减肥但是长期以来的饮食习惯改不掉。难道说 ,我已经患有饮食失调了吗?我妈终于要求我总是忙于工作的爸爸帮我的忙,因此我爸带我去看医生。虽然我说“医生”,但即使到现在我也不确认。我问道,“老爸,我们去看医生吗?妈妈已经带我去看过了,但是没用”。我爸犹豫地答道,“噢,这位医生不一样”...
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Writing critique request: Upgrading your DNA is like upgrading software on your computer

Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, and 7: 我们不知道谁在互联网上泄露了这个发明,但是以后,几乎每个电子公司开始提供廉价的适配器。有的人认为免费开源(FOSS)社区发挥了作用。如果拥有电脑,像把软件更新一样,现在你可以在网上更新自己的DNA。 社会的态度完全改变了:起初,没人想要编辑自己的DNA,但很快发现了“DNA优化人”...
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang's father's explanation of how we reached a “DNA editing revolution”

Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, and 7: 这样的技术变得普遍之后,我爸解释它的秘史。只是一些科学家研究的追求,那时候无法想象将来会导致现在的「DNA改造大革命」。因为最初基础研究进展缓慢,所以他们的期望很低。突然有一天我们收到重大的消息:一个无名的科学家发明了使用电脑创造蛋白质一个方法,就像分子的三维打印一样,...
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Writing critique request: the almost imperceptible effects of Zhou Ziwang's injection

Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, and 4: 一周过去了但没有任何效果,我还是很胖。在做日常活动的过程中,我渐渐忘了那个神秘的医生和他的注射器。再一周过去了,我的行为几乎感觉不到任何变化,我还真想吃巧克力和其他的垃圾食品。其实当时那支注射器有意外甚至不易察觉的影响,不过到现在我还不知道如何清楚的解释这样的感觉。我想吃巧克时,身体似乎自动地反应,...
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How do we trade-off succinctness for accuracy in 每当我爸忙的时侯他就让我吃?

I'm having trouble with one part of this answer from Tang Ho relating to the story Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang was fat when she was young: 我爸忙时就让我吃, --> (每当)我爸忙(的)时(侯)(他)就让我吃, When my ...
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Writing critique request: Zhou Ziwang loses weight, just like everyone else nowadays

Continuing from parts 1, 2, 3, 4, and 5: 那时候因为没有不断的渴望吃巧克力等,所以我开始减肥了。并不像我一天起床后就发现了我如魔法般地变瘦那样,反而久而久之,我的身体越来越改变。从最初胖女孩的样子,我终于获得了健康的体重。对人人来说,类似于毛毛虫变成蝴蝶,我逐渐变成小美女了。我当时没有那么知道的,所以对于这种减肥药连朋友都没告诉过,...